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Never forget

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics' started by KeybladeofDOOM, Apr 4, 2012.

  1. Apr 4, 2012 #1
    KeybladeofDOOM

    KeybladeofDOOM Member

    The look in your eyes, the smile on your face
    The way I loved you, the way my heart would race

    All those memories, all those special moments we had
    How you made me cry, how you made me mad

    The way I smiled when I looked into your eyes
    The way my heart dropped when I learned about all your lies

    Every minute we spent together
    The way we said "forever"

    The pain inside when I watched you drive away
    How I flashbacked to that very first day

    Every single text, all those nights on the phone
    The way I thought I'd never be alone

    All the tears I cried over you
    All the confusion, and not knowing what to do

    You're better off is what I tell myself
    But I still miss her and feel like I'm in hell
     
  2. Apr 8, 2012 #2
    Consilum

    Consilum New Member

    Ouch. the feelings is there like a knife through a salted-wound. Really good man. Only thing I would suggest is clean it up, grammar-wise. You know, like adding periods and such. :3
     
  3. Apr 9, 2012 #3
    KeybladeofDOOM

    KeybladeofDOOM Member

    Yea that's pretty much how it feels lol and yea I forgots about periods :p
     
  4. Apr 10, 2012 #4
    EtherealSummoner

    EtherealSummoner Lamentations 3:22-26

    It is not "Flashbacked". It should be "Flashback". Only one grammar error and addin periods.
     

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