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My poem dump--please rate =^_^=

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics' started by PoisonFilledBlade, Jun 17, 2011.

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  1. PoisonFilledBlade

    PoisonFilledBlade New Member

    Home


    I'll travel to the edge of the world,
    I'm going to polish it as a pearl
    Let's make it beautiful!
    Let's make it wonderful!
    Protect your home,
    Protect yourself.
    Future families
    Future songs
    Future smiles
    Future people
    Future achievements
    They can all be gone!
    No one shall see the day when our world will give way,
    If we keep it beautiful,
    Restore it's silver shine
    And it's golden glimmer.
    It's blue shimmer,
    And white winters.
    I want to stay home for a while.
    In my open home,
    Of stone and wind.
     
    Last edited: Jun 28, 2011
  2. ADogX

    ADogX R.I.P. Captain Unohana

    I was confused at the beginning but then I caught on. It's good but not your best 8/10
     
  3. PoisonFilledBlade

    PoisonFilledBlade New Member

    Thanks for the review ^-^ I know it's not my best, but I know I can do better ^_^ Thanks!!!
     
  4. Bixarihm

    Bixarihm New Member

    HeyHey .... Abit confusing , BUT beautiful . I really enjoyed it , Keep up yer good work ... :3 T.c ENjoy < 3
     
  5. Italia07

    Italia07 Life being a handful ¬_¬

    I thought it was really interesting and settling~ 8.5/10
     
  6. Noir

    Noir

    10/10. It makes me cheer up but not being happy because I rarely smile.
     
  7. PoisonFilledBlade

    PoisonFilledBlade New Member

    Well I hope my poems can soon make you smile ^_^ That is my goal. I want to make the world smile.

    Thank you all for reviews ^^
     
  8. PoisonFilledBlade

    PoisonFilledBlade New Member

    thanks!!! ^^ Always happy to make people happy!! ^_^
     
  9. PoisonFilledBlade

    PoisonFilledBlade New Member

    Judgement

    Judgement is something I can't escape
    All the sounds of their voices just scrape
    Against my ears, on my heart.
    It just rips my soul apart.
    Should you care what I like?
    Should you care who I love?
    I don't think so.
    Just care who I am.
    Just care who you are.
    Don't hurt me!
    Don't pierce my heart.
    You keep your opinion to yourself
    And to others who have the same.
    I'm not going to play your silly games.
    I'm just going to stay the same.
     
  10. ADogX

    ADogX R.I.P. Captain Unohana

    beautiful words. Beautiful meaning. Excellent work. 10/10
     
  11. BadAlex25

    BadAlex25 New Member

    same reason as ADogX. I loved it. 10/10
     
  12. Bixarihm

    Bixarihm New Member

    HeyHEy ,, Beautiful poem much , i love it .. <3 , Simply amazing nuff said ... :3 10/10 ,T.c Enjoy < 3
     
  13. PoisonFilledBlade

    PoisonFilledBlade New Member

    Haha thank you all!! :D I'm so happy!!!

    I'm going to be taking piano lessons soon, and releasing songs. I hope you'll listen to them, they're like my poems ^-^ Thank you again.
     
  14. PoisonFilledBlade

    PoisonFilledBlade New Member

    Fire

    Fire
    Fire burning down
    Waiting for you.
    Looking out a window.
    Watching my heart's city burn,
    Burning down,
    Disintegrating into ash.
    I'll walk,
    Letting my feet turn sooty gray.
    Tears falling into the gray sand,
    Taking some in my hand,
    Remembering what we had.
     
  15. ADogX

    ADogX R.I.P. Captain Unohana

    hmm...dark and deep. Fire's my favorite element. 8/10 =D
     
  16. PoisonFilledBlade

    PoisonFilledBlade New Member

    Thanks :3 I like Fire....

    im axel! xD
     
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