Lyrics I wrote for the girl I lost

Last saturday, my girlfriend broke up with me. It's because I kept wasting time at my friend's house playing video games. I didn't spend enough time with her and now she lives in Texas because she wanted to start her life (she's 18 btw). We've been together since last may, so I've been really depressed. Last Sunday, I've been writing lyrics for her to show how much I'm sorry. She says that her moving is not my fault, but I know it's a little bit of it. I was hoping to share some lyrics I wrote that I want to sing/tell her (I'm still in contact with her thankfully). Most of these lyrics are my own covers of songs already made. I figured I could write my own, but with just the music. There's only 1 set of lyrics that are my own, and another song I added a lot of new unique lyrics to it. So, please, read these lyrics and tell me what you think. I don't want to give her the bad ones. I'll tell them in order from which I wrote them. Here are the first 3:

Cover of Seasons (Acoustic) by DragonForce​

(Verse 1)
I feel all this emptiness, as I try to forget us in vain.
The light of the dark setting sun, may never let my sadness end.
Your voice dies out, as I fear and I doubt, we may never again be together
(Chorus 1)
Your words are dying in the night. My sorrow may last forever.
The seasons pass and sunlight may fade from my life tonight,
Please don't let our love, just burn down in flames.
(Verse 2)
Locked in a prison, while I'm living my worst fear,
of our past and love feeling so dead and gone.
I feel like I'm in darkness, and our dreams no longer meant to be
As I lie awake and curse the rising sun
Sadness inside as I sleep and I cry, as this pain in my heart never ceases.
(Chorus 2)
Your voice is dying in the night. The pain seems like forever.
The days will pass as sunlight may fade from my life tonight
But I'll keep our past, from dying in flames.
(Pre-Chorus)
Your voice dies out, as I fear and I doubt, we may never again be together.
(Chorus 3)
Your words are dying in the night. This pain seems like forever.
The days will pass as sunlight may fade from my life tonight.
But don't leave our love behind
These dark clouds fly above my life, but my love will last forever
The seasons pass and sunlight may fade from my life tonight,
But don't let our past, just burn down in...flames. Burn down in...flames.

Cover of Pieces of Me by Ashley Simpson​

(Verse 1)
In just one day, it all ended. On that day, I kept crying.
And the next day, I wrote you this.
On the day you leave, I will miss you.
And I may never, get a clear view, of your, beautiful smile.
Oh, why'd you have to leave so fast.
I can hardly keep myself, from wishing we could always last.
(Chorus 1)
Oh--you are everything to me.
My love was always real, one no one can ever steal.
Oh--If you must know, then I'll admit, that it was all just my fault, acting like a child
Don't forget me. Please don't. Please don't forget
Because I won't. I won't, ever forget.
(Verse 2)
I feel so, pathetic. I was so dumb, and immature. And I never, knew til' now
So I'm angry, at myself, because I didn't pay, enough attention.
It seemed like, I didn't care. Oh--right now I'm feeling sad
When I heard that you would leave, I felt like I died.
(Chorus 2)
Oh--I beg for another chance, for me to prove to you that I can do so much better
Oh--I just can't ever replace you. You're everything to me, the one and only girl.
You're my one and, only, only true love
(Verse 3)
How come that I--never realized before
All those mistakes, that I made, just ignoring you. I will never again-do that.
In just one day, it all ended. On that day, I kept crying. But I promise, I will-change.
(Chorus 3)
Oh--I will never once again, ignore you like before. No more immature me.
Oh--Because from now on I will be an adult. One who cares for his girl
Oh--please give me one more chance
Oh--I will be there for you. I beg you, please give, me one last chance
I will become, the man, you wished I was.

Cover of Seasons by DragonForce​

(Verse 1)
I've found in the emptiness, that I wasn't really who I could be
The light of the bright rising sun, has sent my old self to his end
Your voice called out, and I knew as I shout, that it's time for my life to be better
(Chorus 1)
My past self has died in the night. I'll make sure that lasts forever
The seasons will pass as sunlight will shine on my life again
My past self shall now, be burned down in flames.
(Verse 2)
I broke through my prison, so no longer shed a tear.
I want us to be together, so don't move on
You've suffered enough of this, and I'll be who I was meant to be
I shall now awake and rise up from the ground
My tears may not die, but my love cannot hide
And this pain in my heart showed me the light
(Chorus 2)
My past self has died in the night. This truth shall last forever.
The days shall pass as sunlight will shine on my life again
My past self has now, been burned down in flames
(Pre-Solo Verse)
As, you leave my arms, I see now what I used to be
Won't you please give: Me one last chance and I'll show you
That I'm who you wished from me
(Chorus 3)
My past self has died in the night. This truth shall last forever
The days shall pass as sunlight will shine on my life again.
But don't leave our love behind.
I'll rid these dark clouds from my life. My love will last forever
For you, I've changed and sunlight has shined on my life again
My old self has now, been burned down in flames. Been burned down in flames.

the songs I mad after this are much better, but tell me what you guys think of these