A song for a girl I like

Let me ask this, would she be moved or highly appreciate it being in japanese?

And another thing to think about. Think of things you would like to do with her, or maybe things you already have done. Like walking in the park? Watching a sunset? And turn those images into lyrics.

 

You're my love
An Angel from above
Im so happy your mine
It's like Im losing my mind
You stun me with every sight
You're so beutiful,you outshine the lights
My eyes open so very wide
Can't believe what I see inside
So come,take my hand
Let's go to heaven and never look back
'Cause as long as I'm your man
Baby you'll never need another fan

Changes are emboldened. What do you think? For some reason I felt myself saying these lyrics in my head as a rap. Is that what you were aiming for?

 

XDXDXDXD Glad to hear it. Was it a rap song though? Because I was at least getting a kick drum beat goin in my head.

 

I think it's fine the way it is. That fact YOU'RE writing the song from YOUR heart to her, is real sweet. We're you putting this with music, like guitar with a specific chord progression?

 

XD Um... which fan? The person fan or the electric spinning fan or the Japanese female fan Dark Riku?

I never did think of the song as a rap song. It is actually nice.

 

Just stick to guitar. I'm a girl, and I can honestly tell you if you want a girl worth while like I think you're trying to get with this song, stick to being sweet with guitar.

I'm a music major so I can help figure out chord progression if you have an ideal melody in mind for it already. But again this is coming from your heart so do only what you think is best.

 

Um... yes brandon. Because he's totally like the best electric fan ever.

You know when I read this I feel I may have stepped over a line that was somewhat unnecessary. Perhaps I jumped at tye chance to write some lyrics. She's actually right. It is more meaningful to write something from your own heart. Otherwise its either you say someone helped you or lie and say you did it yourself. I apologise I didnt think of that sooner.

 

I don't play guitar or anything but have some piano skills and basic understanding of guitar so... But when I read the lyrics, obviously this probably isn't the same melody, but putting a bit of a melody to it, I picture the melody being in A Major. So based off of that I was try maybe a chord progression of A-E-D maybe perhaps. Though you should try to keep a common tone among the chords the whole way through, and E to D doesn't have any, the D resolves easily back to A so... I don't write down a melody first and let me know the key of it.