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Kingdom Hearts IV

Discussion in 'Traditional' started by ImmaRikuOfficial, Feb 6, 2012.

  1. ImmaRikuOfficial

    ImmaRikuOfficial New Member

    This is a fanmade story about a character I created awhile ago. Although I made one before I'm going to create a new and improved one. This is the improved version.

    Featuring Characters:
    Aeth
    Riku
    Kairi
    Sora
    Leon

    Chapter Zero:Destiny Islands

    It all started with Sora, Kairi, and Riku fighting off a swarm of heartless. They were doing good until the heartless began to regenerate at a quick pace. They were surrounding them. All of a sudden Aeth appeared and slammed his foot upon the head of the heartless. The Heartless's cranium shattered as it flailed into a stone pillar and was crushed under the weight. "You guys get to the Gummi Ship, Me and Riku will hold off, if we don't come in thirty minutes leave us behind."Aeth sighed as he sprinted forward ready to attack more. Sora and Kairi took off headed towards the Gummi Ship when Riku handed Aeth his blade, Soul Eater. Then he took out his own which was Way of Dawn and together the brothers slaughtered armies of Heartless chaining together their combo's as they did so. Meanwhile fifteen minutes had passed and Kairi and Sora were sitting on the Gummi Ship. "I'm going to go check on them, you get the engines ready if I'm not back in fifteen more minutes." Sora said as he leaped out and sprinted off where darkness was engulfing Destiny Islands. By the time he got their Aeth and Riku had fainted out of fatigue and Sora had appeared. Out of rage he turned into his valor form then dashed towards the heartless. Using Oblivion and Oathkeeper, he slaughtered multiple heartless before being tackled to the ground. Riku and Aeth awoken to Sora slicing and dicing the heartless once again. When they went to help Sora he denied the help. "Guys, Go to the Gummi Ship with Kairi, I'll sacrafice myself before the heartless eat up the entire island." Sora began to release waves of energy as those waves now collided and released a massive explosion. Riku and Aeth began sprinting away from the expanding explosion as their backs burn't. Riku snatched his brother and carried him in his arms as a vortex of darkness appeared in front of him. With quick thinking Riku leaped into the vortex, his location unknown. Aeth had landed in a strange dark town that looked familiar to Hollow Bastion aka. Radiant Gardens and Twilight Town put together. The kingdom key was next to him on the ground as he picked it up.]

    Chapter One:The Town

    Aeth looked at the keyblade out of curiousity as he was being observed by the man known as Leon. Leon. Leon quietly put his hand on his chin as he continued staring at Aeth, aware that the youngling's presence might've been connected to Sora or Riku. "Hey, Do you know Sora?" Leon said as Aeth looked back quickly and smirked a bit. "Yeah, Sora told me about you, he said you were Leon and you gave him Sleeping Lion."Aeth shyly spoke as Leon nodded. "I'll show you the way to Cloud's place, it's kinda far from here because he likes his privacy from the town's salesmen and saleswomen."Leon began to walk into the direction as Aeth followed after him trustworthyly. Soon enough they reached a small cavern. Leon entered it not afraid of the darkness as Aeth spawned his keyblade, aware of the heartless lurking throughout the darkness. Soon a swarm of heartless ambushed them, before Aeth nor Leon could get a good hit, a male with spiky blonde hair and a black leather coat halfway off with one shoulder pad released his Buster Sword and sliced and diced the heartless, destroying them immediately without warning. He then lunged at Aeth but Leon quickly parried that lunge and stopped the male in mid air. "Cloud, he's not an intruder, he's just fine."Leon sighed as Cloud calmed down and remained in his stationary position. "This is Cloud, he is part of the Hollow Bastion restoration commitee."Leon sighed and sneered as Aeth looked around curiously. Out of nowhere a massive heartless ambushed them and wiped out Cloud and Leon. Aeth felt a sense of rage as he dashed forward into an ambitious fight. He then released his keyblade and sliced and dice at the thick flesh of the monster. The kingdom key didn't do anything but just scratch the monster so Aeth had to take a step further. He jumepd into the air and prepared to somersault. He frontflipped and landed on the monster's back and sliced through its flesh with a clean slice as it fell down. While it was down he attacked it, but then it soon enough got back up seeming to be fully recovered as it flailed its massive arm at Aeth. Just then, Cloud jumped into the attack and got sent into the cavern wall where he fell motionlessly in defeat once again. Aeth kept on trying to fight the heartless but seemed to do nothing to it. All fo a sudden time stopped and three wizards appeared. One was blue, one was red, one was green."We are Flora, Fauna and Merryweather."Flora(Red one) said joyishly. "This should help you in defeating that nasty heartless, let's do this sisters!" Fauna said as they aimed their wands at Aeth and sent magic to his clothes all at once. When the magic hit him he obtained a totally new outfit which was kinda like Sora's but even better. Flora handed him a red orb as he grabbed it. Time unfroze as the beast was making it's way towards Aeth and the three sister's had disappeared. He then swung his keyblade as it collided with the monster's flesh and sent it flying backwards, the enormous heartless crashed clumsily into the cavern wall but plunged back towards Aeth at a quick pace. Aeth then dashed forward as he released a desperado of chaining combos which made affect to the heartless and soon enough wiped it out entirely. The spirits which compounded it now sunk into the sky as its body disappeared. Cloud looked up at Aeth who had his clothes shimmering so dimly black that it was almost blinding. Leon got up as he limped over to Aeth and gave him a thumbs up. Aeth soon enough left after completing his visit, headed towards Beast's Castle.

    Chapter Two:Beast's Castle

    When Aeth arrived the castle was flocking with heartless. Beast was alying on the floor unconcious as Aeth looked at Belle above him. When she told Aeth the entire story, including the man with the black jacket and hood covering his head and face, Aeth suspected it was Organization XIII who was lurking the shadows once more. Riku told Aeth that it Organization 13 was shut down by Sora, Goofy and Donald but it seemed strange. He also said something about there being another Organization called Organization V even though it never had a 5th member. It was only Riku, Axel, Mickey, Roxas. Just then, Aeth saw this strange women that was sleek and her face was kind of distorted. She wore a black robe and was named "Maleficent" with her underling Pete. With one point with her boney pale finger, all the heartless were eradicated. She then aimed at Beast and seemed to be draining all his energy. Manually, The keyblade took over Aeth's body and made him run into the beam that was subtracting Beast's strength. The beam was reflected back to Maleficent when the kingdom key blade blocked it off. "What power indeed."Maleficent glared as she grit her teeth. "Hey don't do that to him." Aeth growled as Maleficent ignored him, treating him like a child. "Maleficent, Back off."A high pitched kinda muffled voice that sounded like Mickey had came from the cieling. Just then, a mouse with big black ears and a black robe came busting through the cieling and landed on the floor infront of Maleficent, in a stance ready for any of Maleficent's magic. He then slapped away any of her magic coming towards him as he sliced her robe, ripping through her feeble flesh under. "Aagh!" Maleficent yelled as she sent Mickey flying back with pound to the head of her staff. She then spawned a few trickster magic spells and vanished into thin smoke that intoxicated Aeth's seeing and stalled him for awhile in the mean time. When he regained his seeing ability, All of the Organization V besides Riku surrounded him. "Hey what up Aeth, I haven't seen you in a while." Roxas said as he smirked. "Me neither, I saw him when he was a child." Axel crossed his arms. "He still is one." Roxas chuckled as Aeth grumbled. "Guys, He's the fifth Organization 5 member, I can sense it, So I'll give him the Organization outfit and a few other things." Mickey said as he handed Aeth a strange shimmering metallic orb. When Aeth touched it it took over his entire body. He obtained an Organization outfit which was pitch black and he wore a black blindfold over his eyes. He had sneered as he wielded Kingdom Key and Sinkeeper which was known as the twin of Oathkeeper and had a violet orb and black instead of white. When they are combined both of the blades attack become 7. Also their abilities change to Glide LVL 3 and Drive Boost. When Mickey and the others saw the result, they looked a bit baffled as Aeth observed his new look. After a few minutes of testing his new abilities on heartless.Which included chaining combo's and abilities to dash throughout the air and on land, he reverted back to his original normal form. "Aw come on, I thought this lasted forever.." Aeth looked bummed out. "Bro, Didn't Mickster tell you, You have to master out this form before unlocking it for unlimited time, like we did." Axel said as he leaped high up into the air and sunk into a vortex which was made by flames. He appeared infront of Aeth a few seconds later."Well anyways, We have to all go and look for Maleficent, Aeth, you head for the West Wing, I'll go through the basement, Axel will go to the East Wing with Roxas."Mickey said as he created a vortex then disappeared. After fveryone departed, Aeth tried creating a vortex but failed and only spawned his keyblade. He shrugged as he sprinted, headed to the West Wing. Out of curiousity, when he reached the gate which was usually blocked by heavy armored knights, he went down the stairs of the pathway across from Beast's Hallway. He found Beast tackling and destroying heartless with his wrecklessness as he ran towards Maleficent who was watching him. She swiftly dodged him and sent a massive parade of thunder and bolts at him. Beast tried running away from the bolts but every few seconds he was zapped. Aeth ran into one of the electricity bolts and reflected them away. He then chased after Maleficent while she was running from him and Beast. He chases her alongside Beast until they get to the Corridor room. She then stops in her tracks and is ready to fight. Beast leaps forward as he swings his claw but misses and get's knocked away into a thick pillar. Aeth then ran forward, slowly changing to his Dark Form without knowing as he dodged desperados of thunder bolts, hazardous hails of rough ice, and exploding flames. After meeting Maleficent face to face, he slices through her with his keyblade and wipes her out. Due to her magic, she heals herself quickly and then teleports off to her castle. After taking hold of the Darkened Soul(The Keyblade Maleficent leaves behind),Aeth heads to her Castle to finish her off.
     
  2. Become

    Become The Pink Opaque Staff Member Moderator Content Writer

    Wrong section. Just so you know.
     
  3. ImmaRikuOfficial

    ImmaRikuOfficial New Member

    Doh,I fail alot.
     
  4. EtherealSummoner

    EtherealSummoner Lamentations 3:22-26

    I am enjoying it... DX But seriously, I do not like the one HUGE Paragraph. It would be easier to read if you make multiple paragraphs out of that one paragraph. Having one big paragraphs can make it hard to understand the story sometimes (To me actually but also to some too) so if you just make one paragraph with 5/6+ sentences and again for another one, then you cna make the story more smooth and more understandable. This is also true for when characters are speaking. Also, remember to capitalize a name of a weapon like Kingdom Key. As for the character Aeth, he is very interesting but I would like to know more about it. You are developing a good story so far.
     

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