I need help.

ok i've been working with this idea in my head about an evil light and noble dark for about two days now but i want to work out all the details before i make an SU. it wouldn't be advanced considering most are refusing to join them because they don't want to improve their skills apparently. (that is what the advanced section is for people! it's not for forcing you to make long posts, but to help you get better so long posts become easy!)
but anyways, here's the plot idea.

The world is split in two, the light and the dark. The light is a technological paradise, forever bathed in sunlight and happiness. The dark is a medieval dream, filled with forests and myths that run wild and free. The two halves were forbidden from ever meeting, as decreed by the two gods that built the universe. One day though, a being of light accidentally meets with a patron of dark. The two talked and exchanged ideals and became great friends before heading home to share the happy news of a another world, or so they thought. The dark one went back and after telling his people of the light was killed for speaking nonsense, nobody believed him. The light child however was believed, the people listened with great interest about this dark land. When the light leaders heard of this they decreed that all must be light, claiming they must spread their happiness. The real truth was that they wanted to enslave the dark and eliminate any threat to their peace.
It happened so fast that nobody even knew what happened, the light attacked with their armies. The dark was unprepared and quickly conquered, save for it's fortified capital. Now the dark has been forced to recognize the supposedly insane stories of the one they condemned. But that's is not the problem, what is the problem s their sages predict that everything falls on the shoulders of two young twins that only just reached their teenage years. The sages have never been wrong so now these two are being forced to leave the safety of the dark capital and go to the light world to end the war.


okay, now that is the idea. it sounds good to me and i feel like i could start it. but the problem is that i keep getting this nagging feeling that it's missing something and it won't work without what it's missing. so any ideas to make this better or should i just start it?

 

well the plot would start off with the twins being told they are going to save the dark and then pretty much being kicked out into a war to go do that.

 

that was something hadn't figured out yet. but that's also something that can be decided over the course of the RP.

pretty much i feel like something, something that could get people's attention and hold it.

also i'm drawing up a blank for how to progress in the story. i've got an opening already planned out, and an idea slowly forming in my head for an ending. it's the middle that i'm getting a blank for.

 

you mean the one who told his side of the world about the dark?

 

well he's the only light side that's opposed to the fighting, having been the only one to meet a dark sider outside of fighting. so when i end up starting this, you want that role?

 

well he knew the dark before they started fighting it, he knows the dark is not harmful. but the rest of his people met the dark through war so they only see the dark as mindless primitives that need to be enslaved, converted or killed.
that's why he'd be against his own kind

 

like i said, the story would open with the twins being told they're destined to save the dark and then being thrust into a war. they would have to reach the light capital and stop the war. how though, i'm still thinking.

and as for the conflict, i thought that would be obvious. it's man vs man/culture vs culture. the light is high tech and thinks that anything not light is a threat to light, while the dark is medieval and myths and they prefer to stick to themselves and not bother anyone. light discovered dark and because it's not light they believe its a threat and attack it to either convert, enslave or destroy it.

and for the rest, why do you think i started this thread? so i could get help in getting these ideas so that i can start the RP in confidence that it will succeed.

 

well as for the barrier, that was already in place. i forgot to mention it before. but that's how the two halves to the world were kept separate for so long. the two met by accident because the barrier began to weaken over the years and nobody notice. then the barrier was completely shattered in a few places from the light attacking the dark.

and please explain what you mean by FF13 cause i still haven't played that.

 

yes. light is technology while dark is myths. magic is considered a myth by many.

pretty much the light is a slight futuristic society with flight abilities and energy weapons.
the dark has many fantasy creatures like vampires or giants as well as magical powers.

 

lol, never played it and i've pretty much stolen it. and here i thought i was original. damn.


anyways, are there any other questions or suggestions?