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My RP character: hes still in the process i would like some feedback!!!!

Discussion in 'Roleplay' started by iseovodoia, Nov 26, 2015.

  1. Nov 26, 2015 #1
    iseovodoia

    iseovodoia New Member

    Name- Ochimaru
    Age- 18
    Race- Human/Angelic Beast
    Position-
    Alignment- None
    Weapon-Dual sided Scythe
    Abilities- God-eater
    Physical Description-average body
    Personality- loner/travels with lil cactaur
    History- mother died at birth. Traveled with father around the world (also with my cactaur!) Killed my father, as i was corrupted with power. After facing my 20th god my cactaur died saving my life. Became a servant to the God of Chaos to one day revive my best friend cactaur.
     
  2. Nov 27, 2015 #2
    Become

    Become The Pink Opaque Staff Member Moderator Content Writer

    1 - Elaborate on Race. It's obviously more original to you, so you may want to give more info somewhere about his race. What is their origin? Where are they from? What is their relation to other races?
    2 - Explain. It's a vague and broad sounding ability that needs to have its span and limitations defined. Traits and abilities does the power allot him? Does it have drawbacks?
    3 - Details. I can only imagine that an Angelic Beast is an impressive looking specimen. Provide more info on appearance. Consider elements such as height, weight, build and unique features to his race.
    4 - More details. How does he act around others and when he is alone? What are his mannerisms? What are his beliefs Does he live with any off mentality stemming from his mixed ancestry?
     
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