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KH: The Breeze of Summer

Discussion in 'Traditional' started by Cameron, May 9, 2010.

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  1. Cameron

    Cameron New Member

    I just wanted to try writing something else than while Roleplaying, since it's been really too long when the last time I wrote something. But here goes the first part of the tale:

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    It was clear and beautiful day in the streets of Twilight Town, and people were gathering at the town centre, since it was a very special day. It was the time of year as people celebrated their freedom from the chains of darkness. Statues were built during the winter, in the memory of all those many Keyblade Wielders who had protected the town from severe damage during the assaults of Heartless. Festivals were hold during the day and elders told stories of those who were chosen by Light to use the Keys over 60 years ago. The day was very important to the people of the planet.

    A group of 17 year old teens were sitting in the top of the clock tower, watching the sun and talking about their weeks, and all the things that young people are used to talk about. There were three girls and four boys - the girls, Tytti, Elle and Marthina. The boys on their part were called: Mano, Janz, Nasi and Jufo. All of them were very good friends, who always went to see the parades on the shade of the night, but spent most of their summer vacation over at the clock tower or at the centre. There were many other teens, but the seven always hanged out together everywhere they could. Even in school, they were always in groups and happened to be in the same class – what a coincidence.

    “I really wonder what Janz would like as a birthday present”, Tytti whispered to Elle, who was sitting next to her. Tytti was a beautiful girl who almost always wore bright clothes and used sunglasses. She had blue eyes which she was shamed of for reasons even unknown to her. She had black hair which she always made look like if they would had not been combed for years. She was a caring person who always wanted to make sure if people around her would be alright. Of the group of seven, Tytti and Janz had known each other for the longest, for seven years. Tytti had an crush on Janz since last summer.

    “Gee, I don’t really know. Give him a kiss or something”, Elle said to Tytti, who immediately blushed and looked away as Janz glanced at the two for a short moment. Elle was a girl with spirit, and said things as straight and quick as she could, if possible. She always wore black clothes and had orange eyes. Her hair was dark brown, which she usually let to be free and feel the waves of the wind. She was very protective to Tytti and if someone ever tried to do anything to hurt her even in emotional way, words just came with non-stop pace from her.

    “Shut it you two, they will most likely hear you. And I don’t blame them if they hear, but most likely they don’t care”, Marthina said to the two sitting on her right while glaring at Jufo with an annoyed expression of her face , as he lied on the warm stone of the tower, bathing in the sun. Marthina was quite uninterested in affairs of love, since she and Jufo had been on a relationship last summer, which ended in uneasy affairs. Marthina usually wore a pair of thorn blue jeans, and a black top. Her green eyes were always noticed , so he always tried to cover them with her blonde hair, since always when someone mentioned something about her eyes, she was pissed off.

    “Haha, ladies, now now. I know that you all adore Janz, but keep it to yourself, I’m soon thinking myself as a number two in the list!” Mano said with proud tone. Mano was always adored in school by all the other girls than the ones in their group. Mano was sporty with a good sense of humor and was nice to almost everybody. Mano was best friends with Janz since the age of twelve, and they always hanged together, if not in their group. Mano wore almost something appealing like jean vest and white jeans. He had short blonde hair, and blue eyes. He had really never had a crush on anyone, but used to have one nighters all the time.

    “Oh come on, don’t talk things behind my back, you know I hate it!” Janz said with irritated tone as he heard the conversation. Janz was a boy who really didn’t fit to the presence of any other teens than the ones that he hanged out with. As said, he was best friends with Mano and they shared their secrets and almost everything that they talked about. Janz was an unusual teen for his strong opinions, as he stayed behind his words before someone would prove him wrong. He was very close to everyone and always wondered why Tytti blushed and was short on words in his presence. Janz usually wore completely black clothes – jeans, tank, and usually had a green beanie on his head. His eyes were blue, and he had long, brown dreadlocks.

    “Janz, calm down. Here, take one”, Nasi said to Janz and handed him a cigartte as he lighted his own. Nasi was very close friends with Janz, as the two had adventures in the town when they were younger. They were the first of the group who had messed with alcohol and tobacco, and even drugs. Only things that the two used anymore were alcohol and tobacco. Nasi was usually as loved in the presence of girls as Mano, but not in the same level. Nazi had grey blue eyes, and mid-long black hair, and usually wore loose black jeans and t-shirt.

    The teen, who sat on the far left, was too concentrated on repairing Tytti’s camera, to join the conversation. The boy’s name was Jufo, who really wasn’t interested in ordinary things, as the machines and technology fascinated him. He wasn’t a nerd to be exact; he just loved working around mechanics and such. Jufo had brown eyes, and very long blonde hair, which he always had on ponytail. He didn’t really care for what he was wearing, usually loose jeans and a hoodie. Jufo and Marthina had a relationship last summer, but it fell for Jufo’s interest in his own things.

    “Say, Mano, who was the girl last night, who walked with you to the cafeteria last eve?” Marthina said with a curious tone.
    “Who? Oh, no one. Just the new girl from school, I just showed her places and things like that. We didn’t actually do anything, than few kisses and-“
    “Oh FOR THE LOVE OF…” Elle stopped Mano from ending his sentence. “First you go out with people, then break their hearts to shreds, is that really so fun?”
    “Actually, it is! No boundaries!” Mano said as he and Janz high-fived while all three of the girls sighed out loud. All of the teens laughed afterwards as the sound of their joy echoed through the air.
     
    Last edited: May 9, 2010
  2. Zero

    Zero ♫♪♫Dear☺God♫♪♫

    Already read this on AnimeMB, but great job. Elle is great and loved the way you made it a whole new story.

    Continue this story! :)
     
  3. OrgMachinimation

    OrgMachinimation New Member

    Your dialogue has a very natural flow to it, not at all forced. It helps the characterization significantly.
     
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