Kingdom Hearts:The Darkest Days OCC/SU

well, i guess i'll be goofy,but theres no other chacther i can be instead of yuffie and goofy? casue if it's not, then i call goofy. i'll make his template later today, cant do it now.

 

Okay, no.
When you create an RP, this is the ANTITHESIS of how its supposed to work.
Not only have you given a shoddy, hardly-there explanation as to how things are meant to unfold in this RP, but you also did it in such a way that doesn't give the this RP any depth, creativity, or originality in all aspects.

You also need to spell check your work. Hectic, not "hecktic.'
Modding, not 'moddleing.'

I also have to mention that your explanation of the setting of the RP makes no sense, whatsoever. How is Kairi supposed to be friends with Cloud and the rest of them when she doesn't really even know them? Not to mention that you've left other characters out of the loop as well.

And--
FOR EVERY SINGLE ONE OF THESE TEMPLATES,
you all need to re do them. A biography, should at LEAST be a paragraph or more, a paragraph being equivalent to 5 or 6 sentences. A biography is NOT just a single sentence.

That makes your characters seem extremely dull and boring beyond all comparison.

I'm going to get Raiden to allow me to create a standard as to how RP's should be formed. Work needs to be put into this, ASAP.

 

awe, thanks for the instructions. makes me feel great that a newbie feels it necessary to comment on every little thing that isn't exactly how he (or she since I don't know what sex you are) likes it. look here. if you don't like the RP, oh well. don't get your panties in a knot over it. no one ever said you have to be in it, alright? and I don't appreciate that someone who just signed up for the forum goes through and corrects everything. yes, he needs to rework the RP a bit. but that's not your place to decide that. it's his, because he's the maker of the RP.

 

-_- Autopsy. My template has what Axe needed & Tiffa's biography is a paragraph long. I even had included her age & gender & what she does. I know how to rp & what needed to be in here, but I decided to keep my mouth shut & let someone like you say something about this OOC. But anyways, I find my template of Tiffa good for now & it sure wasn't a single sentence. It is a paragraph for her & not only that, a few of these templates that I went over didn't even have a bio or some of the things needed to make a template. Anyways, if you want, you can tell Raiden so he can let Axe knows what is missing, but I kept quiet.

Edit: Oh yea, Star is watching over the rp forum regardless if she's on the staff or not & I'm helping her, so don't worry.

 

Name: Yuffie Kisaragi
Weapon: Shuriken
Skill: Like anyother ninja, she is skilled in hand-to-hand combat. She may be small and kind but she can really fight anyone over her size.
Bio: Yuffie born was in Wutai sometime after the end of the Wutai War. Her mother,Kasumi, died of an illness when Yuffie was very young. As she grew up, she watched Wutai being turned into a tourist resort and grew up on stories about how the area used to be a place of honorable mystique before Shinra came.
Appearance:

 

AWESOME!!!!!!!!

 

That's the thing, really. In order for things to progress, regardless of whatever it is, you can't just leave it in the dark, despite how much you may like it, personally. I'm just browsing the forums and I've noticed trends in a few things. But with RP's in general, where myself and Raiden come from, RP's are meant to be substantial. Even if one or a couple of people make decent templates, if the RP itself has no weight to begin with, then the ship itself can't fly.

Point blank, this is an open forum.
You can go in anywhere and comment where you see fit.
Again, I'm only here to help out things.
No need to throw bullets at someone who's shown you the downside of things.

I'm not really looking at you, I'm looking at the fair majority of things in this section as a whole. It was just that this RP had the largest red flag and I decided to comment on it. And I don't really care about who's watching or not.

Fact of the matter is if someone lets a section gets THIS bad, then they obviously need to rethink how it needs to be ran. Forums are about fun and games. But in certain categories, IE; this section -- Also needs to have some sweat put in so you can look back on it and say that you've given it your all to make it your best work possible.

RP's are meant to be stories taken on by people who actively participate.
If you take the time to elaborate on minor details more, it'll show that you've actually put work and your back into something that other people may want to take a bite out of.

Trust me, adding more descriptive sentences won't kill you.
More or less, it'll actually show that you're not just being lazy.

 

sleep with your eyes oepn to night, because I'm going to kill you. also from where you come from is a big differnce than here.

 

haha, cool.
See, how easy was that?

and Honor Guard, don't bother.
Threats are too emotional for my taste.

EDIT, wait a second.
You hardly changed a thing, axel.

 

He did, actually.

 

Do you really think I would spend the time tryin to kill you instead of play halo? I think not, man now he doesn't even know how to tell a joke.