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Another Kingdom Hearts Story: Another Story

Discussion in 'Archive' started by Destiny, Jan 23, 2011.

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  1. Jan 30, 2011 #41
    Become

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    In the third full paragraph I mentioned that Zeije was in the Third District. I just didn't say outright that he was there. And in the fourth full paragraph, I just said that was standing with his back to (or in other words, facing) the doorways that lead to the first district.

    You and Sorabrawl really just need to do a bit of editing, either to keep them out of the Third District, or otherwise, put them in there through their whole conversation.

    EDIT: Since I probably worded that awkwardly, the only thing that would need to happen editwise from Des and brawl is having ran into Zeije in the third district.
     
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  2. Jan 30, 2011 #42
    Moogle

    Moogle Well-Known Member

    Edit it so that they ran into Second district. Sei would have just missed them. Simple enough, right? And the guy Kuro talked to could just be a random person.
     
  3. Jan 30, 2011 #43
    Destiny

    Destiny Guest

    They couldn't have not just noticed the guy, after all he's wearing dark cloak and such, I'll edit mine to the second district(though you really can't get to Merlin's house from the second district) or perhaps the alley it better(though even than it's different because that leads to the secret passage thing and the 'elevator' that's there was operated by Merlin's magic
     
  4. Jan 30, 2011 #44
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    Well I'd appreciate you deciding soon, since it's a decision that will determine how my next post unfolds
     
  5. Jan 30, 2011 #45
    Destiny

    Destiny Guest

    I'm looking and to be perfectly honest as much as I know you'll hate it and hate saying this, the easiest change looks like for you just saying the second district doors stood behind you, and somehow later on mention Junko was the dark cloak figure Kuro spoke to or something. :\
     
  6. Jan 30, 2011 #46
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    And mayhaps even relocate the gathering of the baddies over to the First District?
     
  7. Jan 31, 2011 #47
    Ventus

    Ventus Kickass Keyblader!

    does it really matter? it's just an rp, not a novel!
     
  8. Jan 31, 2011 #48
    Desert Warrior

    Desert Warrior Well-Known Member

    Okay. Bad guys are currently invisible to good guys. Problem solved.
     
  9. Jan 31, 2011 #49
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    An RP it may be, but an Advanced RP it is. All about the nuances on the big kids' playground.
     
  10. Jan 31, 2011 #50
    Moogle

    Moogle Well-Known Member

    So Sora/Kuro still run into the third district as was Junko, Junko is the one Kuro talked to and just teleported or something to follow, minus an obscuring cloak, and the other baddies are heading into the First District? Sound good?

    Your foot. . . it appears to be in your mouth. Continuity is important in ANY story, and if there wasn't any then people could start saying things like, "Oh, I'm suddenly in Russia now."

    Sounds good too, although still with continuity problems.

    Jes.

    Edit: I'm making my next IC post based on the first assumption I made in this post.
     
  11. Feb 1, 2011 #51
    Ventus

    Ventus Kickass Keyblader!

    Hey guys, can I make a villain of some sort?
     
  12. Feb 1, 2011 #52
    Destiny

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    I want to keep the numbers sort of low(they tend to show the most sucess). Perhaps later in the RP. If you want you can control Junko too perhaps *shrugs*
     
  13. Feb 1, 2011 #53
    Ventus

    Ventus Kickass Keyblader!

    I wanted Kuro to have a confrontation with the darkness.
     
  14. Feb 1, 2011 #54
    Become

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    You could always have him cross paths with one of the antagonists. Zeije'll be all out in the open, considering his job is so direct.
     
  15. Feb 2, 2011 #55
    Ventus

    Ventus Kickass Keyblader!

    OK, I don't mind whatever you guys do. I would like to grow a little turmoil within the character so I can avoid the whole weak guy turns into a strong warrior plotline.
     
  16. Feb 2, 2011 #56
    Moogle

    Moogle Well-Known Member

    Just FYI, I do plan on getting a post up tomorrow. I'm just uncreative and out of time at the moment.
     
  17. Feb 2, 2011 #57
    Ventus

    Ventus Kickass Keyblader!

    its fine, take your time.
     
  18. Feb 2, 2011 #58
    Destiny

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    Take your time, I'm running into the same issue(then again causing my brain to bleed due to chemistry isn't helping)
     
  19. Feb 2, 2011 #59
    Desert Warrior

    Desert Warrior Well-Known Member

    I think we're all in the same boat. My last post was stuff I made up just so I made the line minimum.
     
  20. Feb 2, 2011 #60
    Become

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    I did a bit of that (with the Junko and Kilana bit in my last post). But it was more a rundown of observation and conclusions made on the basis of those observations. A little relevant embellishing can go a long way.
     
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