Arena Alpha

YouTube - MUSIC: Valkyrie Profile 2: Silmeria - A Motion of Finishing Blow

"AAAH!" Inida then jumped to the platform 10 yards away from her before the spell hit her, making a big explosion. "MENDO BOMB!" Inida shot a small, pink ball at Rafael, going past him & was ready to explode. "Thundaja? That's a fourth level spell! Still, I will do my best."

 

Inida then used teleportation & went to appeared to a platform closer to Rafael. "This is not good. He knows magic that are very hard to control. Still... CURAGA!" Inida raised her hands up in the air & made a whirling, green wind come straight at her, healing her back to her original state. "EXPRESO!" A big, blue aura started to spin around her rapidly & started to make her react very quickly, giving her a haste effect & increases her accuracy & evasion significantly. She then shot a pink ball straight at Rafael at a fast pace & smacked him in the right arm. "I will do my best. I will not give up!"

 

Hold for a moment. Replacing this post with notes momentarily.

A moogle appears in the judge's box above the arena. He begins to take notes.

Note 1: Not sure whether I should take points off of this one. There shouldn't be that comma there.

Note 2: One point docked for this. You need a subject (Preferably a pronoun) for going Otherwise, it looks like Inida is going at Rafi. Once again, you're using the & marks. Summoner is now at 9.

Note 3: I think you mean 'that', but just the same. Zerieth is docked 1 point and is at 9 now.

Note 4: The & marks again! This time, I'm taking off points. 1 point docked, Summoner is at 8.

Note 5: Not sure about the started to make her react thing. I'm just saying that it looks awkward to me.

Note 6: Just saying, you need a punctuation mark there. Zerieth is docked 1 point and is at 8.

 

(Odin's Sphere?! I PLAYED THAT GAME BEFORE! DX Except that I rented that game & never had the chance to beat it.)

"I... he..." Inida then used her psychic powers to regain her control. "CURAGA!" Inida healed herself & then saw Rafael getting closer. "DISPEL!" Inida shot a white spell that hit him & got rid of his shieldaja spell & used teleportation, transporting herself two platforms behind him. "NESTER'S EYE!" Inida shot a big, data beam at Rafael & it hit him in the back. "Nothing is insignificant! SHELL!"Small, red beams started to surround her...

 

"How am I'm going to... that's it!" Inida started to giggle as her hands started to glow while a pink aura started to surround Rafael. "TELEKINESIS!" Inida started to use her hands, using Rafael as a puppet as she made him slap himself. "How fun to be the puppeteer!" Inida then made Rafael go to the platform ahead of her & then teleported behind him. "BRAIN STORM!" A big, pink storm full of electricity came out & smacked him, sending him flying. "Sadly, my spell, brain storm, causes confusion & silence. With this spell, you will be ending up attacking yourself & you will never be able to use any spells. Are my spells insignificant now?"

 

Inida then started to feel herself burning on the inside. "Vigor." Small, green leaves started to surround herself, healing her. "BLUE MAGIC! DRAGON FORCE!" A green light started to shine from her, making her defense & magic defense gets stronger. "I must... find another way. How in the world did he learn such spells & attacks?" Inida then started to float & started to close her eyes. "I must hurry & do this." Inida used Telekinesis to take control of two platforms & made them surround her while she was preparing to do something...

 

Time freeze. Notes time. *Editing.*

 

Inida started to feel weak and fell down to the ground, but then she opened her eyes. "TIME COLLAPSE!!!" Everything around her stopped, including Rafael, but she still felt herself stiffed. "I only have ten seconds. I must hurry... Clear...Vigor." several green stars started to rush towards Inida, healing her of the paralyzing spell while healing herself. "Now for me to deal with him. NESTER'S EYE!" Inida kept on shooting data beams at Rafael, seeing him taking a lot of hits and seeing him bleeding. By the time she used teleportation and went behind him, the ten seconds was up. "BEHIND YOU!" Inida then kicked him down into the platform and flew two platforms from him. "I'm using way too much spells. I need to be careful not to overdo it." Inida then used her stash ability to use a ether potion on herself...

(<.> THERE! YOU HAPPY NOW?!!!!)

 

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Note 7: The comma is not supposed to be there. Docked one, Zerieth is at 7.

Note 8: One more F**king '&' mark and I will KILL YOU! Docked one, Summoner is at 7

Note 9: Wrong use of lets. Your lets is "he let's the blood out of the wound". The one you wanted was "Let's (let us) go!" Docked one, Zerieth is at 6.

 

"Okay, okay." The moogle grumbled, freezing time. He gestured to Rafael as he cast Curaga on Inida. "You can go back to judgerating. As for you-" Stitzlkin began, turning to the psychic, "Your mind will be wiped and returned to your respective dimension, have a nice day."

She disappeared in a poof, and the moogle took out his clipboard to make some final notes.

*Editing*

I'm going to act like I never saw you editing it. Anyways. . .

Note 10: She felt herself STIFFEN. Docked one, SB is at 6.

Note 11: I'm not docking for this, but you forgot to capitalize Several.

Note 12: Yeeeaaaaaaah. It should be more like, "Watching him take a lot of hits and bleed." Docked one, SB is at 5.

Note 13: Way too many spells. Docked on, SB is at 4.

Note 14: That's injuries Docked one, Zerieth is at 5.

Winner: Zerieth in both instances.

 

( -__- Forget this post. I wasn't able to post when Moog went & interfered from letting me do something after Zerieth's post.)

 

Kilet appeared in the field by way of magical teleportation, grinning a grin whilst his head was cocked. "Dimeeeensional transfeeer is fuuuunny," He cackled in his rather effeminate voice. "An areeeena. Time to prepare!"

With that, Kilet brought a tombstone up from the ground to guard his front as he waited for a competitor.